Need advice on my playing...bad

[veji]

I want to improve my guitar playing and making better songs...I suck so bad...please take a listen to a recent song I've made and if u have time feel free to listen to the other songs on my soundcloud. Please tell me what I should work on to be a better guitar player and song writer..

https://soundcloud.com/davidcho-1/imissu


Thanks

 

[just42dave]

not bad

 

[stanbog]

That was cool. Not sure if that's the art of advice you're expecting, but timing is an issue. Also some bends are out of tune. Plus as whole, imo, the song is a bit repetative.
Hope that helps a bit, rock on!